tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post7298140046678655582..comments2024-03-27T03:21:22.004-04:00Comments on Carrie Harris: Query Ninja - Smurfette's LaughCarrie Harrishttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14893023777471521703noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-25465017856932344142009-06-04T12:15:56.470-04:002009-06-04T12:15:56.470-04:00Tres Smurfy BT,
Thanks for volunteering your quer...Tres Smurfy BT, <br />Thanks for volunteering your query! I think, along with the comments Carrie made, that simply working on your sentence structure will clarify things significantly. You've loaded up the beginnings of sentences before you get to the standard subject, very, predicate portions, and breaking up those sentences will help things flow. You're doing a good job, keep at it!Davin Malasarnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09385823575081492949noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-51486518607421924802009-06-04T08:25:00.009-04:002009-06-04T08:25:00.009-04:00Thanks everyone for the silly comments and laughs....Thanks everyone for the silly comments and laughs. ;)<br /><br />BPV: That's a good point. I think you've got to pick carefully when you're comparing yourself to other books. I did it in my query, but I also had critique partners who suggested it in the first place so I knew it was a good comparison. It didn't hurt that Agent Kate represents the author I used as a comparison, either.<br /><br />I can't believe I forgot to mention the word count! Yes, Tres Smurfy BT, it should be in there! I usually put it shortly after the title is mentioned, but maybe other people put it different places?Carrie Harrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14893023777471521703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-43985316979376119252009-06-03T22:12:42.568-04:002009-06-03T22:12:42.568-04:00Big V - I was advised to include the comparison bi...Big V - I was advised to include the comparison bit and I left out the genre naming bit for similar reasons.<br /><br />The books I mention are in a similar genre and the query and synopsis should paint a clear enough picture for the industry professionals to make up their own mind where they want to place it.<br /><br />Word length is a good question though. And where should it go if it is included?BThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15170193722932454605noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-38973388959488121432009-06-03T20:01:22.994-04:002009-06-03T20:01:22.994-04:00I'm kind of out of touch with all things query...I'm kind of out of touch with all things query-related, but it seems like every one I see lately has an element where the writer compares their book to something already published. Is this a new standard or something? Are agents asking for that nowadays?<br /><br />It seems risky. And space-taking-ey.<br /><br />I'm also wondering where the word-count and genre bits are. Are you omitting them, Mrs. Harris? Or is that no longer pertinent information?Ray Veenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11956279552298172157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-70765471398728400532009-06-03T19:34:47.669-04:002009-06-03T19:34:47.669-04:00maybe a book about the other girl smurfs that were...maybe a book about the other girl smurfs that were banned form the village? And what kind of smurf is smurfette that she abandoned her girlfriends :)Shelli (srjohannes)https://www.blogger.com/profile/17123227845032402600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-86094646078672873292009-06-03T15:12:38.763-04:002009-06-03T15:12:38.763-04:00Smurf-tastic advice. You got your smurf going on ...Smurf-tastic advice. You got your smurf going on that one. I mean really, what a smurfing awesome idea.Jamie Eyberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05875759697016701358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-43394133695212940472009-06-03T13:19:12.362-04:002009-06-03T13:19:12.362-04:00I've read query blogs until I'm smurf blue...I've read query blogs until I'm smurf blue in the face, but for some reason, your madlibs make much more sense to me. Perhaps it's because I can see the actual query bones under the fun fluff. I'm not sure why it's working, but it is! Keep it up!<br /><br />And I'm big into The Humans Are Dead. Rock that binary solo! <br /><br />-MercedesAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-18950766905062910982009-06-03T12:34:57.188-04:002009-06-03T12:34:57.188-04:00Excellent advice as always! I feel the sudden urge...Excellent advice as always! I feel the sudden urge to rewrite all of my queries, even ones for books I've trunked.K.C. Shawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12467201304235217944noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-18935634528211010072009-06-03T11:37:39.351-04:002009-06-03T11:37:39.351-04:00I'd be sold on it as soon as I saw the word Sm...I'd be sold on it as soon as I saw the word Smurf.PJ Hooverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02602205868934777662noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-87332705334620538652009-06-03T11:36:53.619-04:002009-06-03T11:36:53.619-04:00Now I wish I had a finished query to send you!
I ...Now I wish I had a finished query to send you!<br /><br />I will now sing "If I only had a query" to the tune of "If I only had a brain."Mariah Irvinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15181111151756005743noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-90366199218420545922009-06-03T11:07:53.986-04:002009-06-03T11:07:53.986-04:00You could totally use "Business Time". ...You could totally use "Business Time". But please, for the sake of comedy, keep the "business socks" line.Barry Napierhttp://www.barrynapierwriting.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-27621819026887591632009-06-03T09:34:01.373-04:002009-06-03T09:34:01.373-04:00I'm considering scrapping my current adult his...I'm considering scrapping my current adult historical in favour of writing a children's book - it makes so much more sense ;c)<br /><br />Thanks heaps for this QN, much learned and, now, much work to do.<br /><br />Focus, pick one or two major things and work everything around that - gotcha.BThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15170193722932454605noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-56586603983425990702009-06-03T09:04:28.929-04:002009-06-03T09:04:28.929-04:00Great smurfin' advice!Great smurfin' advice!Kelly Polarkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10968381456100611120noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2303232661644308222.post-31024277161370537982009-06-03T08:53:36.561-04:002009-06-03T08:53:36.561-04:00Your posts always crack me up! Keep 'em comin...Your posts always crack me up! Keep 'em coming.<br /><br />Smurf on!MeganRebekahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285116194891827858noreply@blogger.com